Showing posts with label sestina. Show all posts
Showing posts with label sestina. Show all posts

Sunday, 1 March 2020

Deep and Red

by Nick Gisburne



The ritual defiles each waking day
We wait, and know that one of us will die
Two savage cuts will mark the victim’s head
The scarlet cross of judgement, deep and red
Relief for those untouched, those free to cry
Cold silence from the one they take away

Yet still our captors find another way
To magnify the torment of the day
They leave, and when our eyes no longer cry
At sunset, as the day begins to die
When evening brings the shadows, deep and red
They come to find the mark upon the head

She kneels before them, slow to lift her head
Pale fingers try to brush the hair away
It mats and tangles, bloody, deep and red
This simple moment ends her final day
They lead her into darkness, there to die
She screams, a twisted, agonising cry

We hear the bullet; silence kills her cry
The cross a shattered target on her head
This is no way to live, no way to die
Together we must build a better way
And long before we greet the break of day
On all our heads are crosses, deep and red

Their disbelieving eyes blaze, deep and red
And we who stand before them do not cry
They leave us, but do not return this day
Each mark protects the mind within its head
Together we have found a better way
Together, we no longer fear to die

Tomorrow, doubtless, one of us will die
But we will bleed defiance, deep and red
The cuts, the crosses, none will wash away
And if we falter, if we fall and cry
Or face a thousand bullets to the head
At least we learned to live for one more day



A sestina – one of my favourite poetic forms, which is why this is now my fourth.

The narrative is not based around any true historical event. This was my attempt to capture the strength of the human spirit. When all hope seems lost, sometimes we can find a tiny light in the darkness.

After writing several sestinas, I still cannot find a way to appreciate the need for the 3-line envoi, which is supposed to be attached to the end of the poem. It really stands out like a sore thumb and wrecks everything I’ve tried to build. It’s the equivalent of watching a movie, seeing it coming to a perfect conclusion, and then having a narrator say, “And the moral of the story is, don’t trust anyone called Darth.” Believe me, I tried to write one, but it didn’t work for this poem at all, so in this case there is no envoi.

Note that I did add an envoi in my very first sestina, The Jagged Killing Knife, but perhaps I was just lucky, or the narrative took me in a fortunate direction. I may think about the ending before the beginning next time, to see what I can come up with.

I found a lovely quote from Stephen Fry, in his book The Ode Less Travelled, at the start of his section describing how to create a sestina:
This is a bitch to explain but a joy to make.
My thoughts exactly!

Wednesday, 12 February 2020

The Titan of Brass

by Nick Gisburne



Frozen, abandoned, the titan of brass
Longs for a life, for a heartbeat of steam
Crippled and buried, her gears do not spin
Ice grips the metal, the shell of her skin
Centuries sleeping, a desolate dream
Locked in a prison of glass

Whispers remember her, frozen in glass
Murderous, mythical titan of brass
Is she a memory? More than a dream?
Where lies the goddess of shadow and steam?
Visions and nightmares burn into my skin
Images spiral and spin

There, in the north, where the compasses spin
There, in the glacial rivers of glass
There, where the blizzards rake into the skin
There will I find her, the titan of brass
There will I render the ice into steam
There will I follow my dream

Years have delivered me here, with a dream
Flames from my furnaces ripple and spin
Torrents of water and curtains of steam
Boiling away from the prison of glass
There, in the shadows, the titan of brass
Senses, in silence, her skin

Rivers of heat flood the shell of her skin
Long has she waited to wake from the dream
Destiny summons the titan of brass
Axles and flywheels and cylinders spin
Scarlet eyes burning, she shatters the glass
Rising in splendour and steam

Weeping, I worship my goddess of steam
Praising the shimmering lines of her skin
Why does she pick up the sliver of glass?
Did she not call for my help in a dream?
Silent, she watches the severed head spin
Thus wakes the titan of brass

Witness the tyrant, the goddess of steam
Vengeance and terror, set free from a dream
Howl as she crushes your bodies of skin
Welcome your death, see your destiny spin
Freed from the ice, from her prison of glass
Hail to the titan of brass



Another sestina, bent to my will! This time instead of a 3-line envoi at the end I decided to add a complete stanza, to tie everything together. As always, rules are there to be broken if the end result is enhanced. Is this now a true sestina? Probably not. But it’s poetry and it’s done and I like it.

I did have trouble starting this one. I had ‘steel’ and ‘wheel’ as two of the 6 end-words, and that was going absolutely nowhere for story ideas. But as soon as I decided on a replacement word, ‘brass’, I then used ‘glass’ and that was a lock-in for steampunk and ice, which as anyone will tell you is a truly excellent aperitif!

Monday, 3 February 2020

The Candles for the Lost

by Nick Gisburne



We light the candles for the lost
Each restless soul, each troubled shade
And wish that in our guiding light
Their hearts will find the peace of night
We watch the twilight fall and fade
And yearn for those who crossed

So long since they, our people, crossed
A dozen longships, all were lost
But memories refuse to fade
We feel their presence in the shade
And so, together, in the night
We lift another light

They took the tide by winter’s light
The stars would guide them as they crossed
But in the deadly fog of night
The sky, full hidden, veiled and lost
Brought down a dark and deadly shade
Where dreams must surely fade

The flames of courage never fade
They burn as strong as any light
So journeyed without fear of shade
Bold sailors of the North who crossed
Brave heroes, now forever lost
All taken by the night

A silver dawn dispels the night
Our candles turn to smoke and fade
And sorrow burns for those we lost
For those who did not see the light
We honour them, the souls who crossed
The spirits of the shade

In time the sun will fall to shade
And bring the everlasting night
And when the last of us have crossed
Then we from memory will fade
But while we live, we lift the light
The candles for the lost



This is the second time I’ve written a sestina, and the mood is intentionally very different from The Jagged Killing Knife.

The 6 end-words of a sestina repeat throughout the poem. They don’t usually rhyme, but I chose to use 3 rhyming pairs because I enjoy the way the poem flows when the rhymes move around in the stanzas.

The choice of words was not random. I chose 6 words which suggested a sombre mood, and from there, as it often does, the story simply told itself to me. Lost and crossed – that’s all I needed to hear. That reminded me of Viking ships crossing the seas hundreds of years ago. Inevitably some of those ships would be lost. How would their families mourn them?

For this form of poem, a sestina, there is supposed to be an ‘envoi’ at the end, a three-line ‘summing up’ of the poem. But not here. The story is complete, so I think anything added onto it would be out of place. I hope I understand the rules well enough to break them!

Wednesday, 22 January 2020

The Jagged Killing Knife

by Nick Gisburne



Surging, swirling tides of death
Unrelenting waves of pain
Cold, the jagged killing knife
Separates the soul from life
Ruptured heart and screaming brain
And a final, wretched, ragged breath

Twisting, sickly strands of breath
Fade before the face of Death
Wicked claws compress the brain
Squeezing one more ounce of pain
Calmly, Death collects the life
Leaves behind the body, and the knife

She, the one who grips the knife
Draws a sharp and tainted breath
Holds no more regard for life
Than a raindrop for its death
But the tastes of fear and pain
Fill the empty corners of her brain

Dark, this grim assassin’s brain
Wills her hand to touch the knife
Knows her only drug is pain
Schemes to steal another’s breath
Plans a sudden, savage death
Murder is the meaning of her life

Every squalid, slaughtered life
Burns the cancer in her brain
Leads her to the House of Death
Where the jagged killing knife
And the quickness of her breath
Feed the foul addiction that is pain

Terror, torment, panic, pain
Tools to end a victim’s life
Ice and evil chill each breath
Tortured nightmares plague her brain
Tenderly, she lifts the knife
Prays before she carves the smile of death

“Lord of Pain, free my brain
Take my life, guide the knife
Hear my breath, all I am I offer you in death”